The Getaway

By Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris

Image credit: Yaopey Yong @ Unsplash

In response to Sadje’s
What Do You See Prompt #146

She needed to pedal faster, but her little brother was barely holding on. Marika promised her mother that she would get her baby brother to safety and she would do it, no matter what. Kiyoshi begged her to slow down, but she could not. He slipped and screamed, with one hand she hauled him up behind her, yelling at him to hold tight around her waist.

Marika risked a quick glance behind her, she gasped. Hundreds and hundreds of citizens ran from the blossoming white cloud that had enveloped the city proper. She pedaled faster, up and up to the top of the mountain and down the other side until she found her private hideaway; a small cave that was just big enough for them, plus the big bicycle her mother had borrowed.

They had only just entered the cave and pulled the over-large bicycle in when the entire mountain began to shake. The wind moaned as though tortured by the ominous white cloud and then a noise so loud, they held their hands tightly over their ears for a very long time. Then there was nothing but painful silence – everywhere.

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12 responses to “The Getaway”

  1. judeitakali Avatar
    judeitakali

    Tense and beautifully written.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much Jude. Did I see you received a glowing honorable mention in a major competition? 😊

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  2. Nope, Not Pam Avatar
    Nope, Not Pam

    Wow, that was outstanding. The atmosphere you built made this a riveting read

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so very much! 🙏

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  3. paeansunplugged Avatar

    What a moving story!

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  4. Sadje Avatar

    What a moving depiction of that tragic event. Thanks Ami for joining in.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you for a great prompt Sadje! 😊

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      1. Sadje Avatar

        Always a pleasure

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