On the Southern Side

In response to Rochelle Wisoff at Friday Fictioneers 02/14/24 in 100 words!
Photo prompt by © Dale Rogerson

On the Southern Side

He lives there, ‘cross the lake that’s froze now, but in the spring there’s frogs and minnows. We ain’t ‘posed to go in there on-a-count of we don’t live on that side-a that fence there. We used to be able to go swimming’ an all, but then they bilt those big houses and that’s when they put up that fence.

I seen him one day, walkin’ his fancy dog, an talkin’ to it just like it were a person. At first I wondered had that man lost his marbles, but I figure he just loves it that much.

Lucky dog.

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30 responses to “On the Southern Side”

  1. Carol anne Avatar

    Awesome story ❤ ❤

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  2. Angela Avatar

    Agreeing with everyone else, but the voice really does make your story something special! -Angela

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much Angela! 😊

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  3. The Sicilian Storyteller Avatar

    Absolutely love your voice. Perfect.

    Great story!

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      thank you so very much! 🙏

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  4. GHLearner Avatar

    I echo what others said about the voice that makes the story. Childhood friends or even sweethearts divided by classism. I wonder if he remembers her.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much GH! I’m so happy you enjoyed it!! 🤗

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  5. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Ami,

    Your narrator’s voice sets the stage. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so very much Rochelle! 🙏

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  6. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    I love the voice and the world of us and them you created. That’s the way it is, sadly so. How they watch the man who cares for his dog and feels envy…lucky dog. Well done!

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you most kindly Brenda! 😊

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  7. msjadeli Avatar

    Gypsie, the voice in this rings with humanity, even though being human isn’t all it’s cracked up to be with our rep. The MC’s benevolence even as he’s being excluded brings a tear to my eye.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much! Your interpretation and attention brings a tear to my eye as well!
      🙏🥲

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      1. msjadeli Avatar

        You’re welcome and appreciate being introduced to that character ❤

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  8. notestowomen Avatar

    Great story. I liked how the MC went from thinking that the man was crazy to realizing how much he loved his dog.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you very much! I’m so happy you enjoyed it! 🙏

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  9. James McEwan Avatar

    There are them and then there are us. Is that how it will always be>?

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      It feels like it doesn’t it? ❤️

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  10. Dale Avatar

    What a wonderful write, Gypsie-Ami! The voice was great.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you Dale, very much appreciated! 😊

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  11. Iain Kelly Avatar

    The physical and metaphorical divide. Nicely done.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much lain! 😊

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  12. Margaret Avatar

    This is great. Terrific voice, and I love the ending.

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    1. Gypsie-Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much Margaret! 🙏

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  13. Sadje Avatar

    A very well told story Ami. Loved the vernacular touch.

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      1. Sadje Avatar

        You’re always welcome 😍

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