Disappearance

By (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris

Response to prompt by Charli Mills
for Carrot Ranch Literary Community. In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about disappearance.

It was here, seemingly only a few moments ago. Yet, neither could find it anywhere. They searched for it together and they searched apart. Neither one could believe they had lost it and it was gone.

Deciding to search one last night; the searching was awkward, stilted and definitely not how it had been. There was no team-work, no coordination. Their basic understanding of how to work as one unit no longer existed.

They sat upon the bed just looking at one another. The disappearance of their love had gone unnoticed, just as the disappearance of years had.

99 Words Excluding Title and instructions.

Comments

27 responses to “Disappearance”

  1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Thank you JeanMarie! (Happy Dance!!) 😊

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  2. JeanMarie Avatar

    I really like the twist at the end. Well done.

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  3. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Gloria – That it is. Thank you for reading. 🙏

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  4. Gloria Avatar

    Aw…sad! 😔

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  5. Norah Avatar

    It’s a sad but often true story, Ami. Well told.

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Norah – Thank you most kindly! 😊

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  6. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Dear Nan – So very pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you very much! 😊

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  7. pedometergeek Avatar

    Excellent story. I was totally taken in, wondering what had disappeared. ~nan

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  8. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Yes, although one side can not carry the entire relationship.

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  9. Liz H Avatar

    And that’s how it slips away.
    The trick is finding the magic words to make it reappear…

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  11. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Thank you most kindly Charli! 😊

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  12. Charli Mills Avatar

    You set up the curiosity for what was lost and when the reveal comes it feels all the more devastating. Well done.

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you most kindly Charlie! 😊

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  13. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Love can be a fickle friend.

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Most certainly Keith. More fickle than friend! Thank you so much for reading. 😊

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  14. rothpoetry Avatar

    Very good! It does seem to happen at times.

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Seems to happen more often than not anymore – sadly. 😵‍💫

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  15. ben Alexander Avatar

    I really enjoyed this piece, Ami! So well done 😀

    BTW, Thank you for sharing your poem with me – I posted it at The Skeptic’s Kaddish just now –

    Alone again, or: Love poem

    Sincerely,
    David

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you so much David! I am honored!

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      1. ben Alexander Avatar

        🥰 Ami 🥰

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  16. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

    Thank you my friend, I did just that! 😊🙏

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  17. Sadje Avatar

    Great take Ami. You’ve linked it to my post. The original link is in my post. You should go to it and submit the form so that your story is included in the final round-up.

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    1. (Gypsie) Ami Offenbacher-Ferris Avatar

      Thank you Sadje, I went back and did so. Thank you for the heads up … I seem to screw up more often than not. LOL Thank you again my friend. 🙏

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      1. Sadje Avatar

        No worries Ami. That’s how we learn to do it right.

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  18. Paula Light Avatar
    Paula Light

    Good one…

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